he woke up to her
curled into his shoulder
her face so close
he could breathe her in
she was awake
watching him
(this was new
but he never thought about it)
he kissed her
his sweet lips unsuspecting
held her closer
then he got out of bed
showered
shaved
dressed
came down to breakfast
expecting the usual
i am leaving you
she said
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19 comments:
n he heaved a sigh of relief! ;)
LOL@blunt edges' comment!! :D
Woah! Loved the title and how it all comes back at the twist in the end!
so we should just kiss a girl without brushing to get rid of her?
lol @blunt edge..free
What a great post. I think it would be sad to simplify anything, really.
Hehe...bad breath can cause breakups for sure! He did not learn, he missed the brushing part again when he showered, shaved, dressed! ;)
Is it just me or this forms a fantastic graphic piece in my head?
Love it, love it.
@blunt, not quite what i was thinking...but it's possible ;)
@arslan, blunt sends hugs and kisses!
@anupama, thank you, my dear. life's like that sometimes.
soin, you should know! peace ;)
@eve, thank you and i agree.
@notmanish, you nit picker, careful before my mother marries you!
@R, draw it, draw it!
Whoa! Deep... Sad... Very well told!
And then..I read Blunt Edges' comment! lol:)
You have a lovely blog. Will browse through it more sometime! :)
thank you for coming by @ashley. blunt kind of took the edge off it, didn't he ;) heh.
It's weird. Two people watching one movie, the same movie. But one sees the end credits rolling while the other is still waiting for the intermission to end.
Dark! And I love it :-)
Makes me miss the stuff I used to write at http://thoughtsafari.blogspot.com. You might appreciate that kind of writing :D
LOL ... I'm with blunt edges on this!
You :D
Good one!
@Cloudcutter - :) That was superbly put.
@ Mentalie - "It was for the best, she was never worth you", friends would say. Don't you hate em all?
@cloudcutter, that was exactly what i wanted to say, only better!
@juggler, thank you, i'll certainly go read thoughtsafari and i'm sure i'll love it. will keep you posted.
@swb, i knew that ;)
@sangfroid, thank you, but to quote shaggy's immortal line - it wasn't me!
@atrisa, yes, it is the kind of dutiful line that we've all heard at some point...!
No way, mine was just the client's brief. You rolled out the perfect copy ;-) But thank you and Atrisa for being so nice!
oooh, CC, you advertising jargonista! like i've said before, you're the one who's too nice :)
now this was awesome..i do that many times in my 55ers but i never thought one can do that in a poem..superb :)
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